1) The pitch.
(Transcript)
"Hello, my name is Lauren; I am a 4th year at the University of Florida, and I am an avid scavenger of food. I don't know about y'all, but I search far and wide and sometimes, I wish I had food at the most inconvenient times. Have you ever wished your friends or even a stranger could deliver you food late at night when you're studying and immobile at Club West or Marston? Well, let me introduce you to an interactive app that connects you to a community of food deliverers to you. This app called "Growl" will allow you to connect to your friends in an interactive app community where you all are able to accept each other's personal food requests and retrieve these food items in a "food-run-mission" under a limited amount of time, like 20 minutes, which the hungry person can set. Let's put this into a scenario.
You're sitting alone at Marston. You hear your stomach growling. You log onto the app, post on your status something along the following lines: "I am hungry for some McDonalds, and I need it in 15 minutes." If someone on your friendslist is available and accepts your food challenge, he/she will accept the chance to buy your food item. With every successful food run, your friends can rack up points for prizes, and after every food delivery, you can rate if the deliverer was a 4/5 star deliverer, if the food was correctly ordered, etc. You can even change your settings and allow other community members that aren't your friends to deliver you food. You should never go hungry late at night. Join the Growl app community. Remember. Don't let your hunger roar, just "Growl."
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
The feedback I received on my pitch was the technicalities of my video, so this time around, I didn't want to distract viewers with gimmicks and video tricks. I wanted people to listen to the gist of the app idea.
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
I incorporated less visual distractions. I actually focused on just the pitch for the idea.
Let me first say that I really like how you began your pitch. You strted it out with giving a personal i.e. to your project and posing a question that let me relate to you. This got me emotionally involved as well. I started relating your story to my own (even though "your story" was just a small statement, it still helped me become immediately invested in your idea.
ReplyDeleteHere is my pitch!
http://bonanient3003.tumblr.com/post/139515823174/week-7-elevator-pitch-2
Hey Lauren! I think your idea is really well thought out! I think you have almost all of the basic details of the business venture down, which is really good. The only thing I am skeptical of is how the app actually works. I can't even get my friends to deliver me food when I offer to pay them, so I'm not sure people would be willing to use this app for "prizes" and such. If you'd like to check out my elevator pitch, you can do so here: http://sabinaent3003.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
ReplyDeleteThat's a good idea but I'm not sure how likely people would be willing to do something just for points. I think that monetary rewards are better like tips, but if that's the case the app becomes Qwerk. The pitch itself is good too, but I think that you looking at the script affected it some. Overall good idea and good pitch! You can see my pitch here: http://collinpd.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html.
ReplyDeleteHey Lauren,
ReplyDeleteI think your pitch is really good. You conveyed your app very clearly and it was refreshing to watch pitch with the person seemingly excited about their idea. Your idea is very interesting, it would be cool to see how it worked out. I think that with enough incentive people would be willing to do it, and presentation of the challenge might have an effect. We're supposed to put a link to our blogs in the comments so here's mine http://triedbloggingendeduponpinterest.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-2.html